I am analyzing a passage from pages 108-109: "'Hold on, Tommy'... 'I'll be all right, Miss.'"
A: 3. My knowledge of the text seems superficieal; I don't really dive deep into the meanings of certain things, and I only really talk about two things.
B: 6. I definitely talk about the use of literary features, specifically tone and structure, and talk about how it creates questions in the reader's mind leaving the passage open for interpretation. However, I do not go into very much detail.
C: 2. There is some organization; I don't jump back and forth between points. However, it in not as organized as it should be and I often found myself at a loss for words and/or repeating myself.
D: 2. I don't speak as formally as I should. I use made-up terms such as "othering" and don't use a varied vocabulary.
Kyle!!! I really enjoyed hearing your analysis and perspective on this passage. I think it was a really tough one to have to analyze but you definitely rose to the occasion. (: Your introduction was clearly laid out and your context awareness was well illustrated. The two themes were very well selected and I was excited for your take on them. I think your analysis would be much more effective if you selected fewer quotes/examples to illustrate them and instead, talked about a fewer number of examples for a greater amount of time. Try numbering the examples on your planning to help with that organizational piece as well. If you're looking for a better word for "othering," try "alienating". Overall, a well done analysis and blog post! (: Way to go!
ReplyDeleteKyle!!!!!!!!!!! OMG! your analysis of this passage was incredible :P I think that you hit on some very solid points when you spoke of Tommy's child-like innocence in his word choice and thoughts. I think that you could further that by speaking of how that sets up Tommy as a strong believer in deferrals. Overall, that's a good point to mention, and i luved how you used quotes from the passage to ram home the points you were making. I also was pleased with your vocabulary and usage of naïvety and such words. Your diction matched the situation of a formal IOC. Plus, your voice is smooth like a freshly-waxed bosom. One suggestion i might share is to show a more in depth knowledge of the work as a whole and how the passage and the literary elements that you speak of affect the reader's perception of the work and set up the rest of the work ;) Great JoB!!!1!
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